I posted quickly last time, during "recess" break - sorry I forgot about you saying she orally narrates with a lot of detail - too much sometimes. I remember that now - that will teach me to try to quickly check the boards, won't it?

I have a nephew who did this. He is an animated little guy that loves to tell long stories with great detail. I love him dearly, but I know what it feels like to be that "captive" audience!

I think your dd has decided that a good narration is a
long one. This is not always true though. Sometimes a long narration is like a winding road, when all you want to do sometimes is get there! It helped my ds to give examples of this, and also my nephew too. I gave this example to help my ds understand this:
Suppose I just got a call from the doctor. He has an important message for me to give you. I could narrate this message to you 2 different ways. Here's the first way:
The doctor called a few minutes ago, and he had an important message for me to give you. He said he got your test results back - you know, I bet he gives a lot of tests in a day! Maybe tests for flu, blood tests, strep throat tests. His voice sounded kind of stressed too, now that I think about it. He was probably having a bad day. I wouldn't want to wear a white coat all day, but the stethoscope would be fun to wear. He was kind of short on the phone. I bet he was in a hurry. He must have a lot of calls to make in a day. He does have a phone in his office though, so that's good. I like to use the phone too. I'd like a phone in my room. He did tell me your test results on the phone though. He said you have Influenza B. I had that one time, remember? I think it was last year - no maybe 2 years ago. Well, when you have Influenza B you need to take some medicine, but I can't remember the name of it. It is sooooo expensive though - maybe if we got it a different place it would be less though. Um, he said something about how often to take it too. I think he mentioned how long you'll be sick, but I don't remember that. The end.
Here's the second way:
The doctor called and had an important message for me to give you. You have Influenza B, and you need to take some medicine called Tamaflu. It is important to take this medicine twice a day with food. If you start taking this medicine right away, you should be feeling some better within a few days, and completely better within 7-9 days. You can call the doctor back if you have any questions.
This helped my ds to see that though the first way was longer, it was not very helpful nor an accurate retelling of what the doctor said. The second narration was shorter, but a very good narration because it retold all of the important points. After giving several examples like this, my ds seemed to understand better that I was not looking for an extra-long narration with too many details, but rather a more to-the-point narration with just the important parts. Using the tips in the Beyond Appendix and also the narration lesson ideas in the daily plans of Beyond guide helped get my ds on track for being able orally narrate well. I hope some of this helps you too!
In Christ,
Julie
