Opinions of first CTC written narration

[Mom2Monkeys]

I'm pretty proud but have no idea if this is on par for a rising 6th grader in her first week of CTC. She's 10, turning 11 mid-June (almost here!) Let me know what you think. I feel like the 5-8 sentence length is holding her back slightly, but also forcing her to get creative and write better sentences. Instead of short sentences, she is combining answers to the guiding questions into long and interesting sentences to be within the 5-8 limit! Critique ME as the teacher on how to help better her skills in this area. I had to have her write it out then we talked about spelling, capitals, and punctuation. Then I typed it up for her so she wouldn't have to rewrite the entire thing. Her writing is quite sloppy so we made a first draft this way for now.

Noah got on board the ark along with his wife, sons,
son's wives, two of every unclean animal, and seven
of every clean animal, and then God shut the door.
Water came from the sky and under the ground for forty
days and nights until the waters sank the mountains, and
every air breathing thing not aboard the ark died and was
buried in the great amount of mud the water carried. The
ark floated for five months until it landed on Mount Ararat.
There Noah sent out a raven after forty days that kept flying
out and returning until it found dry ground. One week later,
Noah sent out a dove who returned because she couldn't find
a resting place, so a week later Noah sent it out again and she
returned with an olive branch. She was sent out a third time
and did not return. Noah knew this meant land, so after another
month, when he was six hundred one, he, his family, and all
the animals got off the ark.

[Heather4Him]

Sounds great!!

[Mom2Monkeys]

OK.....51 views and 1 comment. I'm starting to think it's not good. hahahaha. kidding.

thanks heather!

[Gwenny]

Sounds great!
I think it's typically more difficult for girls to keep it to a smaller amount of sentences. Boys dont usually have that problem. You are right that the limit is good. It does force them into really thinking about what to say and not to say.

[netpea]

Looks great to me!

[Mom2Monkeys]

Sounds great!
I think it's typically more difficult for girls to keep it to a smaller amount of sentences. Boys dont usually have that problem. You are right that the limit is good. It does force them into really thinking about what to say and not to say.

If she were to be doing ORAL narration...oh yes...the words never end. LOL


Thanks everyone...I think once we are out of these more familiar stories I may be asking for opinions again. This one came quite easily for her. She was asking if she had to include ONLY what she read in the story today or if she could include things she already knew about it.