Unit 5 written narration PHFHG thoughts?

[Mom2Monkeys]

This is DD10's written narration from unit 5. It's still quite guided this early in the guide but I'm wondering if we are on the right track. She has really good comprehension and I'm just trying to gauge her actual narration skills. Communicating her thoughts into words orally has greatly improced, but weitten not sure. She has shocked me with her increased speed and atamina though!
I do NOT have good comprehension so it's difficult for me to judge. I imagine I'll get better as my health improves and as we learn this skill together!
I know we practice the skills from the narration skills list one at a time so do I not make her correct spellings just yet??
Here it is, with original spelling and punctuation (spelling isn't her strong point!)
When God spoke to Abram, he told him to leave his country, relutives, and his fathers house. After God spoke to Abram, he obeyed God because God promised him 3 blessings, and he believed. God told Abram that from him would come the Isrilite nation, and from the Isrilite nation would come Jesus, who would bless the whole world.

[JanOH]

The sentence structure is much better than what my 10yods would have come up with in Week 5 (we're in week 16). He is still working on not starting every sentence with "and" or "then" I would help correct the spelling then have them copy it for a final copy. I would also help them discover the missing word in the one sentence. I do this by having him read the narration aloud to me. He actually sometimes find his spelling errors that way too.

I'm guessing that you'll start to see a big difference as you continue to work through the guide.

[Mom2Monkeys]

The sentence structure is much better than what my 10yods would have come up with in Week 5 (we're in week 16). He is still working on not starting every sentence with "and" or "then" I would help correct the spelling then have them copy it for a final copy. I would also help them discover the missing word in the one sentence. I do this by having him read the narration aloud to me. He actually sometimes find his spelling errors that way too.

I'm guessing that you'll start to see a big difference as you continue to work through the guide.

That's encouraging! Thank you! The missing word is actually MY mistake..I was typing on my phone. I'll correct it in the original post.

[JanOH]

[/quote]That's encouraging! Thank you! The missing word is actually MY mistake..I was typing on my phone. I'll correct it in the original post. [/quote]

I'm laughing that it was your typing mistake. See, I didn't even think of that because we're still working a LOT on proofreading and making sure that we really wrote everything that we thought we did.

[my3sons]

This is DD10's written narration from unit 5. It's still quite guided this early in the guide but I'm wondering if we are on the right track. She has really good comprehension and I'm just trying to gauge her actual narration skills. Communicating her thoughts into words orally has greatly improced, but weitten not sure. She has shocked me with her increased speed and atamina though!
I do NOT have good comprehension so it's difficult for me to judge. I imagine I'll get better as my health improves and as we learn this skill together!
I know we practice the skills from the narration skills list one at a time so do I not make her correct spellings just yet??
Here it is, with original spelling and punctuation (spelling isn't her strong point!)
When God spoke to Abram, he told him to leave his country, relutives, and his fathers house. After God spoke to Abram, he obeyed God because God promised him 3 blessings, and he believed. God told Abram that from him would come the Isrilite nation, and from the Isrilite nation would come Jesus, who would bless the whole world.

Your dd is doing well with her written narrations, Tamara! This is Unit 5, and she is going to be working on this all year long, but I think she did well. I'd also have her fix all of the spelling and add an apostrophe to "father's house". To fix spelling errors, I just jot the correct spelling in the margin of the line that has a word or words that need fixing, and have my dc fix it/them using my notes. Having her read it aloud to you is a good tip that HOD suggests, and we've found that to be a great tool for our dc finding their own mistakes. I like the ebb and flow of your dd's narration, and I especially like the "heart" in it (i.e. ... and he believed; who would bless the whole world). Lovely writing! Putting some "heart" in written narrations (IMO) is sometimes harder to teach than the mechanics of a written narration. It sounds like your dd is already showing promise for both.

In Christ,
Julie

[Mom2Monkeys]

This is DD10's written narration from unit 5. It's still quite guided this early in the guide but I'm wondering if we are on the right track. She has really good comprehension and I'm just trying to gauge her actual narration skills. Communicating her thoughts into words orally has greatly improced, but weitten not sure. She has shocked me with her increased speed and atamina though!
I do NOT have good comprehension so it's difficult for me to judge. I imagine I'll get better as my health improves and as we learn this skill together!
I know we practice the skills from the narration skills list one at a time so do I not make her correct spellings just yet??
Here it is, with original spelling and punctuation (spelling isn't her strong point!)
When God spoke to Abram, he told him to leave his country, relutives, and his fathers house. After God spoke to Abram, he obeyed God because God promised him 3 blessings, and he believed. God told Abram that from him would come the Isrilite nation, and from the Isrilite nation would come Jesus, who would bless the whole world.

Your dd is doing well with her written narrations, Tamara! This is Unit 5, and she is going to be working on this all year long, but I think she did well. I'd also have her fix all of the spelling and add an apostrophe to "father's house". To fix spelling errors, I just jot the correct spelling in the margin of the line that has a word or words that need fixing, and have my dc fix it/them using my notes. Having her read it aloud to you is a good tip that HOD suggests, and we've found that to be a great tool for our dc finding their own mistakes. I like the ebb and flow of your dd's narration, and I especially like the "heart" in it (i.e. ... and he believed; who would bless the whole world). Lovely writing! Putting some "heart" in written narrations (IMO) is sometimes harder to teach than the mechanics of a written narration. It sounds like your dd is already showing promise for both.

In Christ,
Julie

YOu always make me feel so great! I had her think about "father's house" and she remembered the rule! I also lightly marked incorrectly spelled words and had her look in the reading to fix them. Except I did write out Israelite in the margin for her. She read it aloud to me several times but catching her own mistakes is about half there. She did catch a couple of them herself. She's doing well learning that with dictation. I think as she is less leashed in with the guiding and limits of the lesson, she will blossom much more! She could only write three sentences this time That was tough! Looking at the written narration lessons later in the year....she's so ready to do those! She will be quite happy to get to them. The step-by-step is something I love, and this just happens to be an area she would love to move to even more creative, less guided. She still needs some training though She has "heart". Love it! Thanks, Julie.